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Tuesday, November 18, 2008

THIRD ASSIGNMENT

Dear students,Sorry that I cannot come to class for your grammar presentation today, (Wednesday). Something happened and my doctor advised me not to go to work at least for today.
Well, your next assignment would be commenting on your friends' introduction. I have done one comment on Amina's introduction and I believe that you can do the same. Please include the name of the writer of the introduction, i.e. Shaipul, ... commented by, Dzulkarnain and end it by inserting your name. This will be your assignment that I would have given if I had gone to teach you today.
Please do this assignment, and make sure that you have the comment posted by Sunday, 12 noon.
Don't have too much fun without me around in Nilai. Make your grammar presentation better for next week.
Take care then...
Madam Zubaidah

18 comments:

Nurul Fashahah said...

Farhana : I think her introduction is too long and I notice some grammatical error. Overall, her introduction is very good.

Asma' : Her first sentence is too long yet very,very good.

Saipul : A very good introduction however there are some grammatical error. And his thesis statement is excellent.

Amina : I think her introduction is quite long but marvellous.

Ira : A very good introduction but I notice some grammatical errors.

Asnani : Her thesis statement is very good.

Nabilla : Very good introduction and thesis statement.

Fatin : Good introduction and she is really good at making sentences.

Arsalnaa : Excellent introduction.

Nurul Ain : Good thesis statement and i think she miss some words in the introduction.

Achu : I think her introduction is quite too long but then, her intoduction is very good plus excellent thesis statement.

Syafiq : A short introduction but good thesis statement.

Salihen : I think he did not include his thesis statement.

Dzul : Good introduction but he did not include thesis statement.

Atiqah : A good introduction and thesis statement but some spelling error.

Thank you! =)
commented by Fashahah.

Nur Atiqah Bt Ahmad Zairul said...

Siti Farhana : There are some grammar mistakes in her introduction. I think she clearly states her views, about this topic, in her introduction.
Asma' Nadhiyaa : Her first sentence is too long. The eloboration in her introduction is weak. The introduction is short.
Saipul : I think he wrote a good introduction. Maybe he can makes his introduction better by improving his vocabulary.
Amina : A good intoduction and complete with example.
Ira Rozana : A good introduction but I think she needs to add some more details in her inroduction.
Asnani : Good introduction but I don't agree that advertisement is merely an information in a newspaper. Actually advertisement generates revenue for many people.
Nabilla : Some grammar mistakes and spelling errors.
Fashahah : Good introduction.
Fatin : As long that I concern, we can't use 'I' in our essay.
Nurul Atiqah : Very good introduction.
Nurul Ain : Good but she did some careless grammar mistakes.
Abu Arsaalna : Not bad.
Syafiq Amani : Too short, weak elobaration, no thesis statement and he did not states his stand either he agrees or disagrees with this topic.
Solihen : Weak elobaration, no thesis statement and also he did not mentioned his stand.
Dzulkarnain : No thesis statement but not so bad.

Ira Rozana bt Mohd Asri said...

Siti Farhana : Good vocabulary and elaborations.
Asma' Nahdiyya : I think she wrote very long sentences and weak elaborations.
Saipul : Good elaborations and has parallel thesis statement.
Amina : Very good introduction and clearly states her views.
Nur Asnani : Has some grammatical errors in her introduction but good elaborations.
Nabilla : She clearly states her stand although has some spelling and grammatical errors.
Nurul Fashahah : Has some grammar mistakes and the thesis statement stated is not parallel.
Fatin Afiqah : Although she has some grammar mistakes, she has clearly stated a parallel thesis statement.
Abu Arsalnaa : Weak elaborations.
Nurul Ain : I think she has stated a parallel thesis statement and her stand clearly but has some grammatical errors.
Angelic Achu : She has a very good introduction, good elaborations and clearly states her stand.
Syafiq :weak elaborations and didn't state his stand.
salihen : Too many examples written and didn't state his stand.
Dzulkarnain : I think he has good elaborations but didn't state his stand.
Nur Atiqah : A very good introduction and thesis statement. Her elaborations are also very good.

Commented by,
Ira Rozana.
Thank you.

Nabilla Nur Ashraf Bt Mohd Suhaimi said...

Siti Farhana:good introduction and elaboration.
Asma' Nahdiyya:no grammatical error.
Saipul Baharim:have several grammatical errors but still have a good introduction.
Amina:good elaboration and examples.
Ira:short introduction and no grammatical error.
Fashahah:short film in radio?and still have a good inroduction.
Fatin Afiqah:i don't think 'I' can use in an argumentative essay and have several grammatical errors.
Arsalnaa:have several grammatical errors.
Nurul Ain:good elaboration
Angelic Achu:too long introduction but have a good elaboration in her introduction.
Syafiq:too short introduction and do not have a detail elaboration.
Salihen:have several grammatical errors.
Dzulkarnain:good meaning of advertisement.
Nur Atiqah:a very good introduction and elaboration.

commented by:Nabilla

Teacher said...

Dear students,
Good that you are really into submitting your assignment before the deadline. I have faith in you that you all are intelligent and have discipline. I have to be honest that your responses are overwhelming and I am so proud of you. Now that you have noticed that your friends have given you constructive criticisms, make sure that you improve on your introduction. Therefore, on Monday, I will collect your corrected introductions based on the comments your friends have given to you.
See you on Monday then...

angelic achu said...

siti farhana:some grammatical error and wrong usage of words.:)
nani:some spelling error.(news paper>newspaper):)
asma' nahdiyya:too simple.just two and long sentences.:)
saipul:some grammatical error.:)
amina:quite good introduction. :)
ira rozana:maybe we should not use past tense.:)
belle:some spelling error.:)
shaha:i think the used of short films is not suitable.What about advertisement in nemwspaper, in magazine?:)
nurul ain:some grammatical error.:)
fatin:yes..she should'nt put 'I' in an argumentative essay.:)
syafiq:no thesis statement and too short intro.:)
salihen:no thesis statement,and maybe too detail and needless example.:)
dzul:erm i think the definition should be from our point of view instead of refering to dictionary..no dictionary exist during the exam.However ur intro is quite good.:)
abu:quite okay. :)
wafa:too short and simple.no clear introduction.Should never use shortform.:)
atiqah:Good introduction.Erm watch out with ur spelling :)

p/s:I hope all of you are fine with my comments on you guys introduction.ngee..(^_^)Thanks for all da critics and complement.Really appreciate it.(^_^)
Together improvise our writing//

commented by:nurul atiqah abd rahman

Nur Asnani binti mohd basharuddin said...

Farhana: Good as a start. Good elaboration. I love the word that you have been use.
Asma’: Clearly you state that you disagree with the topic. Good introduction.
Saipul: Your thesis statement is good
Amina: Good introduction. Keep it up!
Ira: You are good in twisting your idea. I almost have been cheated by you.
Nabila: I don’t think that giving the thesis statement as example in the introduction is good idea.
Try to give other example.
Fashahah: Good introduction. Keep it up. Try your best.
Fatin: I like you introduction. You forget that we should not use ‘I’ in the essay.
Abu: Have some grammatical error.
Ain: Nice try. Keep it up.
Acu: Well done, your introduction is good.
Syafiq: Too short, try you best.
Salihen: Good example. Nice try
Zul: Good definition, good elaboration .
Atiqa: Nice try, good introduction. Keep it up.
Wafa: Manipulating and cheating can be the same thesis statement.
p/s Good job all of you.
Comment by: Nur Asnani binti Mohd Basharuddin

siti farhana said...

Asma : simple and brief introduction to the overall topic..

Saipul : good introduction to the topic..

Amina : good vocabulary and ideas in the introduction..

Ira : nice introduction...

Asnani : Nice introduction and spreading of information..

Nabila : simple and brief introduction..

Fashahah : parallel of ideas in the introduction...

Fatin : good introduction to show that she is disagree about the topic

Abu : good introduction to the topic..

Ain : brief introduction to the topic..

Acu : good effort to the introduction and spreading of information...

Syafiq : sorry to say, but too short introduction..can be improve..

Zulkarnain: good introduction and information...

Atikah : nice and good introduction..

Wafaa : no thesis statement but still a good introduction..

Salihen : good example..

commented by farhana..thank you..

asma' nahdiyya binti che ab. rahim said...

Siti Farhana : good vocabulary
Saipul Baharim : there are some grammar mistakes and but i'm not sure if the thesis statement is parallel.
Amina : good introduction and parallel thesis statement
Nabilla : i think she already makes her points' elaborations in her introduction and there are some grammatical errors.
Fashahah : good introduction
Fatin : i think she made a mistakes by using 'I' in her introduction but overall it is a good introduction.
Arsalnaa : there are some grammatical errors
Ain : there are some grammar mistakes but it is a good introduction.
Achu : the introduction is long but it is a good one and she also has a parallel thesis statement.
Syafiq : there's no thesis statement.
Salihen : there's no thesis statement
Dzulkarnain : Good introduction but he does not has a stand and a thesis statement.
Atiqah : good introduction.

arsalnaa said...

Farhana: good thesis statement,
Asma’:very good
Saipul:good overall introduction to the topic.
Amina: Well done
Ira:good introduction
Fashahah:good thesis statement
Fatin:good arguments
Ain:good introduction
Acu:very good
Syafiq:good introduction and information
Salihen:good facts
Zul:
Atiqa:
Wafa:too simple

by abu

Teacher said...

Abu... I think you could do better than just giving 2 or 3 words in each of the comment you have for your classmates.Zul, Atiqa.. can you believe it that Abu has nothing to say about your introductions?

arsalnaa said...

i Really don't have the guts to comment my classmates because i don't feel that i am qualified enough to do so....


as for atiqah her introduction is good plus her strong arguments

for dzul's his introduction is also good however i kind of having a hard time finding his thesis statement.

syafiq said...

Farhana : I think her introduction is too long and I notice some grammatical error. Overall, her introduction is very good.
Asma' Nadhiyaa : Her first sentence is too long. The eloboration in her introduction is weak. The introduction is short.
Saipul : good introduction to the topic..
Amina : I think her introduction is quite long but marvellous.
Ira Rozana : A good introduction but I think she needs to add some more details in her inroduction.
Nabilla : She clearly states her stand although has some spelling and grammatical errors.
Fatin : Good introduction and she is really good at making sentences.
Arsalnaa:have several grammatical errors.
Nurul Ain : I think she has stated a parallel thesis statement and her stand clearly but has some grammatical errors.
Achu : I think her introduction is quite too long but then, her intoduction is very good plus excellent thesis statement.
Asnani : Good introduction but I don't agree that advertisement is merely an information in a newspaper. Actually advertisement generates revenue for many people.
Salihen : I think he did not include his thesis statement.
Zul: Good definition, good elaboration .
Atiqah : A good introduction and thesis statement but some spelling error.
wafa:too short and simple.no clear introduction.Should never use shortform.:)
Nurul Fashahah : Has some grammar mistakes and the thesis statement stated is not parallel.

Dzulkarnain Rousan said...

Siti Farhana : Good vocabulary,grammar and elaborations
Asma' Nahdiyya : Very good introductions.
Saipul : Good elaborations.
Amina : Very good introduction and clearly states her views.
Nur Asnani : Has some errors in her introduction but good elaborations.
Nabilla : She clearly states her stand although has some spelling and grammatical errors.
Nurul Fashahah : Has some grammar mistakes and the thesis statement stated is not parallel.
Fatin Afiqah : Although she has some grammar mistakes, she has clearly stated the thesis statement.
Abu Arsalnaa : Weak elaborations but good introduction.
Nurul Ain : I think she has stated a parallel thesis statement and her stand clearly but has some grammatical errors.
Acuh : She has a very good introduction, good elaborations and clearly states her stand.
Syafiq : Good introduction but has good elaborations.
salihen : good elaborations but need some improvements on the elaborations.
Nur Atiqah : A very good introduction and thesis statement. Her elaborations are also very good.
ira rozana:not bad and quite good introductions.

* Countess La Veyna * said...

i think that my comment was not succesfully sent that day as my commnet did not appear here.
so i'll send it again and sorry madam for the late awareness of this but i am very sure i did it before the dateline.

so here it goes again,

Farhana : i was wondering who did that intro as it has some bombastic words that i just knew.

Asmaa' : i disagree with your point.

Saipul : obviously you have similar points as mine.

Ira : yours is well done.

Asnani : it is weel done.

Nabilla : just a typical gramatical error i guess.

Fashahah : i'm kinda in torn whether to agree with you or not.

Fatin : i don't agree with you on your last thesis statement.

Abu : yours was fine.

Ain : i agree with you.

Achu : i'm wondering if you write that in paper would it be super long?

Syafiq : tooooo shortt...

Salihen : can do better.

Dzul : just to share, miss arlina once told me to not do the introduction by giving the definition from the dictionary because in exams, you don't have the dictionary beside you and you should not get used to that in exercises too.

Atiqah : keep it up.

Wafaa : u have to spell tv in full form. don't get use to spell like that in exams.

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Jay said...

Farhana: Good as a start. Good elaboration. I love the word that you have been use. Asma’: Clearly you state that you disagree with the topic. Good introduction. Saipul: Your thesis statement is good Amina: Good introduction. Keep it up! Ira: You are good in twisting your idea. I almost have been cheated by you. Nabila: I don’t think that giving the thesis statement as example in the introduction is good idea. Try to give other example. Fashahah: Good introduction. Keep it up. Try your best. Fatin: I like you introduction. You forget that we should not use ‘I’ in the essay. Abu: Have some grammatical error. Ain: Nice try. Keep it up. Acu: Well done, your introduction is good. Syafiq: Too short, try you best. Salihen: Good example. Nice try Zul: Good definition, good elaboration . Atiqa: Nice try, good introduction. Keep it up. Wafa: Manipulating and cheating can be the same thesis statement. p/s Good job all of you. Comment by: Nur Asnani binti Mohd Basharuddin